오픽 선택 필수 질문 22 공원과 관련 된 사회 문제

I'd like to know about a major issue related to public parks today.
what is the biggest problem park users face? what should be done to solve this problem?
please explain in detail

 

내 한글 문장

 
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저번에 참석해서 한 시간 정도 사람들과 같이 공원에서 쓰레기를 주웠어요
한 시간 정도에 쓰레기봉투 20L짜리 3개를 주웠습니다.
그 뒤로 쓰레기 버리는 것에 좀 더 신중해졌습니다.
가치 있는 경험이었습니다
사람들의 인식이 중요한 것 같아요
 
 

내 영어 문장

 
It's hard question to me
I think the problem is trash in the parks
most of parks are wide and can make a lot of trash when I spent time in parks
So I can find a lot of trash everywhere
theses days there are valuteer sysyem to pick trash in the parks
I took it togheter about a hour the other day
I made 3 trash plastic bag almost just one hour
It was amazing
from that day on I was carefull to take out the trashs in the parks
It was really worth it
I think It's inportant to people think about trash
 
 

AI 문장 수정

 
That's a tough question, 
but I think the biggest social issue related to parks is definitely trash.
Most parks are quite large, and unfortunately, a lot of trash accumulates when people spend time there.
So, you can often see discarded trash lying around, which is really a shame.
Luckily, these days, there are many volunteer groups that organize cleanup activities in parks, often called 'plogging' events.  
I actually participated in one of these events myself just the other day.
In just about an hour, I filled three 20-liter trash bags!
It was quite an eye-opening experience to see just how much trash was there.
From that day on, I've become much more careful about how and where I throw away my trash, especially in parks.
It was a truly valuable experience. 
I really believe it's important for people to be more mindful and aware of the trash they create.
 
표현 줍줍
related to ~와 관련된
accumulates 축적하다.
discarded : 버려진
Plogging : 달리면서 쓰레기 줍기
eye-opening : 놀랄 만한
I've become much more careful about how and where I throw away my trash
: 쓰레기를 버리는 방법과 장소에 대해 훨씬 더 신중해졌습니다.
valuable : 소중한